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Post by wtfhoward on Apr 9, 2013 19:48:01 GMT -5
Haley: Well poo.
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Post by Princess of Promise on Apr 11, 2013 21:12:03 GMT -5
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Post by Chidorifool101 on Apr 11, 2013 21:57:36 GMT -5
Sammeth: Yes. A banner. I shall read that Saturday. I must study at this moment and I will not have time to tomorrow, as you know. Em: Well, I'll add some 'stuff', don't worry  |
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Post by Princess of Promise on Apr 12, 2013 11:20:07 GMT -5
Okay, tomorrow. Good luck understanding the joke |
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Post by wtfhoward on Apr 12, 2013 17:57:03 GMT -5
Haley: Ohohohohoho!
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Post by Princess of Promise on Apr 12, 2013 19:15:58 GMT -5
ohohohohoho indeed.
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Post by Chidorifool101 on Apr 13, 2013 17:46:14 GMT -5
ho ho ho
merry Christmas
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Post by Princess of Promise on Apr 13, 2013 17:52:04 GMT -5
Ohai Haley.
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Post by Chidorifool101 on Apr 13, 2013 18:24:51 GMT -5
hi Sammeth ._.
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Post by wtfhoward on Apr 13, 2013 18:24:55 GMT -5
ohio
is where my Kezia CD is.
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Post by Princess of Promise on Apr 13, 2013 19:07:12 GMT -5
Hey guys, you read it yet? I need feedback for next chapter improvemet.
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Post by Chidorifool101 on Apr 13, 2013 19:53:53 GMT -5
OH, ALMOST FORGOT. I'll do it now  |
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Post by Chidorifool101 on Apr 13, 2013 20:26:27 GMT -5
OK, so I just read it over. I really, REALLY like the plot. It seems well-developed, and suspenseful in a good way. Dom is so funny, might I add  And I like how Chris is the reasonable character, because he seems like that in real life. I only found one possible error, unless it was meant to be that way...: "Poking his head through the gap, Chris could see Dom sitting on the floor; a pink leopard shirt draped over his arms while he slept away once again." shouldn't it be: 'a pink leopard-print shirt', considering leopards don't have shirts? I mean, I got what you were trying to say, but I just thought it would be more correct with the '-print' added. ._. Other than that, I love the story!! I can't wait for the next chapter just a quick question though... what exactly does "Hallo, sind Sie nun in" mean? :0 |
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Post by Princess of Promise on Apr 13, 2013 20:41:55 GMT -5
German. It's supposed to be the flight controller attempting to cater to common Earth languages :LOL:
Thanks :3 Fixing that now.
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Post by Chidorifool101 on Apr 13, 2013 22:27:56 GMT -5
You're welcome c: Oh, that's cool! I actually thought it looked German when I first read it, so... I guessed correctly  |
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