PBB '12

It definitely can... Gosh, I hate math tests. x.x

I actually have a Geometry quiz on Monday, and I am TERRIFIED. Going to have to study a lot, I guess D:

so far its not bad, its basically alg 1 review and building on that. I hated geometry so this is easy. If you like algebra, you wont like geometry.

GUYS I'M DYING OF AN ESSAAAAAAAY.

GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHH.


I have an essay in US History that is due Friday, and I thought I had another week to work on it. ppapdfgtprph

It's on Bacon's Rebellion, which I get the gist of, but because this is my first essay of the year, and I absolutely despise writing essays, I'm having SO much trouble!!

I have an outline... and I'm starting my first sentence. But my mind is just so BLANK.

I'm not sure how you guys could possibly help me, if you are willing to, yet again. This post might just be a complaint about writing.

BUT I DON'T WANT TO WRITE THIS. NYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHH.

I don't even know what that is yet ._.

but it sounds difficult..

Between the 2nd to last or 3rd to last sentence there needs to be a quick explanation on how it lead to rebellion. Everything else has a sense of logical flow to it (things lead to another) but then at the end it just leaps to Bacon stepped in and somehow rebellion happened. To me that's why the flow feels awkward around there.

As I said in the post above, once I got some time to think things though good enough, I was able to figure out quite a lot.

I've got my paragraph structure all set, and that was probably my biggest worry. Because in order for me to write somewhat good, I need to know what paragraphs come in what order, so.

I guess all I could ask of you guys to do is read over what I have, and suggest anything that might need some revising, which I hope isn't too hard to do ._.

I'll be posting my paragraphs tomorrow, because I think I'll have them all done by then.


And, I just wanted to say: Sorry for posting so much about school and this STUPID ESSAY. As I said before, you guys help me out the most with these kinds of things. My sister just tells me that my essay is good the way it is, my dad says it's fine, mum says it's fine... etc.

My friends in school have no idea what to write about, and if they do, are not able to help me out because they have their own shebang going on.

So you guys are my heroes when it comes to this stuff :3

Well, I'm glad you guys don't mind! I always feel like asking for help that has to do with homework or an essay is such a burden to you guys, because you probably have to deal with your own work.

So, as scheduled, I'm going to post all of my paragraphs today, besides my introduction. I would like for you guys to COMPLETELY rip it apart; point out every flaw there is, please. This is probably the worst essay I've ever written!!

I need quite a lot of help making this good, or so I think.

HERE WE GO:

2) Nathaniel Bacon had once said "all power and sway has got into the hands of the rich" and that they "have always curbed and oppressed" the common people "in all manners of ways." This meant that the rich colonists had goals of wanting to prosper and keeping the unwealthy at the lowest they could get. However, Bacon did not like that. He wanted all common people to have the same privileges and standards as any rich person would. Focusing on the unequal distribution of wealth across the colony, Bacon gathered a following that had the same mindset as him.

3) Nathaniel Bacon and his supporters had different views compared to Governor Berkley about how to resolve the disputes caused between social classes. Unlike Berkley, Bacon wanted a dramatic change in how things were. He wanted the common people to live similar to how the rich colonists did, and that meant through benefit. He also wanted the laws to be changed so that they weren't so harsh and difficult to follow for the lower classes. Another difference between Bacon and Berkley is their view on war. Bacon wanted to initiate right into war with the Native Americans without permission from the government, but Berkley wanted to try to settle it peacefully with the House of Burgesses. Berkley actually succeeded in obtaining an alliance with a Native tribe, but Bacon and his followers, in frustration, killed off that tribe. Eventually Berkley agreed to only fight the Native Americans he wasn't friendly with, but Bacon persistently wanted war upon all Natives. Disagreements became more prominent than ways to stop the fighting, and therefore, all of the social classes clashed together in a rebellion.

4) The class struggle during the late 1600s was within a "complex chain of oppression." The Native Americans had thought that they had been cheated in a transaction by an English colonist named Thomas Mathew, so they stole some of his hogs. As payback, Mathew and his friends attacked the Natives, which resulted in a death of one of the Native Americans. Since then, the Natives and the Colonists had been attacking each other. The government could not stop the riots in the peaceful way they had wanted to, and this only proved that they were inefficient, and eventually, unresponsive. Angered that nothing was being done, Nathaniel Bacon lead angry farmers and indentured servants, prisoners that sign a contract to work off their sentence, into an "antiaristrocratic" and "anti-Indian" war.

Conclusion) Bacon's Rebellion was caused by an overwhelming struggle between social classes, and an unresponsive government. The aristocrats in Virginia, where the rebellion took place, had goals that consisted of prospering to their full extent and pushing the lower classes as far as they could go down. They wanted to sustain their wealth so that it could last for their lifetimes. This cause tension between the upper and lower classes of the colonists. The differing views between the two rebellion leaders- Bacon and Berkley- only enforced the fighting to arrive much sooner. Neither man would agree on each other's plan to quell the predicament already beginning to grow. The "complex chains of oppression" gave a disposition that during this time period, there was a lot of hatred amongst social classes. The Native Americans loathed both the colonists and higher-ranked officials, the colonists despised the Natives and their government, and the government only really detested the troublesome colonists at first but eventually began having problems with the Natives. Bacon's Rebellion then broke out, and resulted in many crucial effects, such as inferring that African slaves were a better choice for getting labor done. Class tensions only worsened and this influenced a great Revolution that would resolve in the near future for America.


You guys don't need to fully tear apart this essay to help me make it better by today, you have tomorrow also, considering that is my last day to work on it.

But sooner is better, because I have an orthodontist appointment tomorrow that will take an hour away from my homework time (and I'm not sure if I will have a lot of homework) ._.


THANK YOU if you help!! I can't say that enough, but it really means a lot to me for you guys to help