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Mar 20, 2013 22:31:42 GMT -5
Post by Chidorifool101 on Mar 20, 2013 22:31:42 GMT -5
Well, I'm on my fifth paragraph now. I still have the conclusion to write, so there'll be a total of six paragraphs.
I think my fourth paragraph is absolutely terrible; I horridly transitioned into India and how the European's methods effected them, yada yada.
Oh, well. I did the math, and out of 150 points for the entire Imperialism test (the test packet and essay separate), I should get around an 80. I'm just estimating here.
With just the test packet thing I did today, which was 100 points, I think I got a majority of that correct. So if I didn't even write an essay, I'd still get about a 60, close to a 70.
Though because I am doing the essay like the good student I am, it should raise my grade even just a little bit.
I'm hoping to get at least 20-30 points out of 50 for it.
Therefore, my final score should be around an 80, but I could just have little faith in myself, when in reality, I'll get a 90 for the final grade. Who knows?
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Mar 20, 2013 23:02:19 GMT -5
Post by kueller917 on Mar 20, 2013 23:02:19 GMT -5
So the structure is looking a lot better, so I'll just add some more abstract comments here. These are more suggestions though and can be taken to any extent you wish.
The White Man's Burden was a commonly used phrase at the time, and in historical context. Maybe adding that it was coined by Kipling's writings. It would give the impression the Burden was more of an overall mindset instead of just a book or work.
You could make "Africans were not allowed to attend" its own sentence, and following it you could explain the powerless and unvalued aspect. Breaking it up might make each point stand out a little more. You could probably move the Berlin Conference part to the previous sentence ("A meeting, known as the Berlin Conference, was advised..." or something like that)
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Mar 20, 2013 23:18:19 GMT -5
Post by Chidorifool101 on Mar 20, 2013 23:18:19 GMT -5
I'll look back at my essay and make some changes  I'm nearing the end of my essay, finally. I'm actually considering making it a 5-paragraph essay again. The conclusion (6th para.) would basically be a repeat of the 5th paragraph anyways. I'm feeling so much relief now that I know I can sleep soon. My goodness, what a headache I have. I've got a total of 4 pages typed up, which is the most I've ever typed for an essay in my life. [I bet once I start research papers, though, it'll be about 10 pages  ) |
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Mar 21, 2013 0:13:12 GMT -5
Post by kueller917 on Mar 21, 2013 0:13:12 GMT -5
The best-scoring essay I've written was only 4 and a half pages long oddly enough.
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Mar 21, 2013 17:58:28 GMT -5
Post by Chidorifool101 on Mar 21, 2013 17:58:28 GMT -5
That's not too bad! I'm not sure how much you're usually supposed to write considering your age (older you are, more you have to write..?). Impressive, though.  |
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Mar 21, 2013 19:52:50 GMT -5
Post by Princess of Promise on Mar 21, 2013 19:52:50 GMT -5
gods i am not looking forward to this crap
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Mar 21, 2013 20:05:50 GMT -5
Post by Chidorifool101 on Mar 21, 2013 20:05:50 GMT -5
Me neither, Sammeth. It's torturous enough to have to write just two pages |
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Mar 22, 2013 8:25:29 GMT -5
Post by Princess of Promise on Mar 22, 2013 8:25:29 GMT -5
I hate essays enough as is.
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Mar 22, 2013 12:02:58 GMT -5
Post by wtfhoward on Mar 22, 2013 12:02:58 GMT -5
I only like it because it's practice. Most of the time I bullshit through it to get an A.
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Mar 22, 2013 12:41:51 GMT -5
Post by Princess of Promise on Mar 22, 2013 12:41:51 GMT -5
Me too |
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Mar 22, 2013 13:17:30 GMT -5
Post by wtfhoward on Mar 22, 2013 13:17:30 GMT -5
*high-five*
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Mar 22, 2013 13:21:35 GMT -5
Post by Princess of Promise on Mar 22, 2013 13:21:35 GMT -5
Whee  |
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Mar 22, 2013 14:35:36 GMT -5
Post by wtfhoward on Mar 22, 2013 14:35:36 GMT -5
oh my god this audio post on tumblr is so fucking funny.
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Mar 22, 2013 20:48:16 GMT -5
Post by Princess of Promise on Mar 22, 2013 20:48:16 GMT -5
which one
i'm still getting over the newest jared gif on my tumblr feed :LOL:
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Mar 22, 2013 23:03:42 GMT -5
Post by wtfhoward on Mar 22, 2013 23:03:42 GMT -5
It's a reading of this shitty ass romance novel.
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